Floating gently through the clear blue sky, Billy stared ahead, hoping he would reach his destination soon. The clouds were endless; covering the horizon as far as the eye could see.
He had set off with a dream but didn’t know if it would come true.
As the clouds parted, he could not believe what he could see...
he had found a land of Ninjas he fought for his life and was taught the ways of the white Dragons
he was the best student and went on to be Hattori Hanzo one of the best Ninjas in the world.
As the clouds parted, he could not believe what he could see...
he had found a land of Ninjas he fought for his life and was taught the ways of the white Dragons
he was the best student and went on to be Hattori Hanzo one of the best Ninjas in the world.
This writing started so beautifully, painting a picture in my mind. Then you rushed it. Try to continue with the same depth throughout your piece, even if you don't finish it.
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